Lightningflash and Runiki

HystericalCupcakes

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Lightningflash and Runiki

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Name: Lightningflash

Age: 3 years, 1 month

Birth Month & Year: April, Year 3

Gender: Male

Element: Air

Physical Description: Lightningflash is a dark brown wolf with a little yellow lightning bolt on his muzzle.

Personality: Sometimes stubborn, kind, helpful, quiet, skillful, clever, observant, reasonable, cunning, intelligent and respectable.

History: Lightningflash doesn't really have much history :l

Helper: Teluka

Other Information: Nothing.

Helper Name: Teluka

Species: Hawk

Gender: Male

Looks: Teluka is a gray hawk with dark green eyes and sharp, black talons.

Personality: Teluka is friendly, but rough when he needs to be. He is a bit of a hothead, but he's usually calm and cool. Unlike Lightningflash, Teluka is a bit loud and arrogant, but Lightningflash has learned to put up with it.

Other: Nothing.

Name: Runiki

Age: 2

Birth Month & Year: August, Year 4

Gender: Female

Element: Shapeshifting

Physical Description: Runiki is a midnight-black wolf with a crimson scar over her right eye, red tribal marks (SORT OF like Okami's), ice blue eyes and a white tail tip.

Personality: Silent, mysterious, shy, a bit awkward, clever, swift, intelligent, intellectual, truthful and determined.

History: Runiki doesn't have much history, either XD

Helper: Orchard

Other Information: Nothing.

Helper Name: Orchard

Species: Dormouse

Gender: Female

Looks: Orchard is a furry, brown dormouse with dark blue eyes.

Personality: Orchard is optimistic, protective of Runiki, patient, courageous, and willing to do anything to protect Runiki.

Other: Nothing.

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Lightningflash / Air / (Not known yet) / Teluka / Hawk

Runiki / Shapeshifter / (Not known yet) / Orchard / Dormouse

Shomei

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Date: 04:50 AM May 4, 2013

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ER, I know that I'm not a Mod of Admin, but er.... Let me give you a few critiques so you can revise before they can get to it. Ah.....

I'd probably flesh out the personality a little more, and use different scenarios to base how your wolf would react. This can be used as a fall-back if you start wondering what your wolf was supposed to be like.

How would Lightningflash react to a war? How well does he play with others? Does he have problems with authority figures? Does he have a nervous quirk? A special tick? If someone were to randomly start a fight with him, how would he respond? Things like that. It's hard to imagine a character from just a few words.

I'd also add a history. Histories are important. They're a big pain in the butt, but they're important, because they also help flesh out and bring a character to life. For instance, I once had a wolf who was sexually abused as a pup, and as such was terribly fearful and untrusting of males. ((granted, he didn't last that long, HOWEVER)) It was something intersting that made him who he was. Don't be afraid of sounding cliche. This site is getting to the point where almost every story has been taken. ^^ We've got the runaway-princess, the peppy-little-explorer, the stubborn-son-of-a-who -wants-to-prove-himself, the Meh-I'm-doing-this-just-for-fun, the I-murdered-my-family, the-omg-my-past-was-so-terrible-so-now-I'm-mentally-scarred...... We've got them all.

BUT! Having said that, every history is still a unique piece of art. ^^

Next article of business..... What kind of Hawk is Teluka? Red-tailed? Harrison's? Chicken? Prairie? X3 There are a looooooooooooooot of different hawk species out there, my friend. If you need help finding a hawk species, I'd love to be of service. ^^

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I'm not done with these yet, but after I make my wolves, I can make yours, 1 PP for 5 wolves, if that sounds fair.

Munsteh

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Date: 10:08 AM May 4, 2013

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Lol Ben so many words don't scare her xD Looks great so far! All you are missing is a little bit of a history and a species of helper, the personality will do, because it is similar to what others have Done.

so, just go ahead and add a small piece if history, perhaps a reason why your wolf is here. Also, add a soecific breed of your hawk, like Ben had said. Specific helpers make it more clear for us to have a wider range of selection, you can view the cencus for an example of types of helpers we have already chosen, if you want.

ben, I know your trying to help and all, but try to leave this part of NWE to the mods and admins, it is our job after all, try to refrain.

Thanks!

-- Edited by Munsteh on Saturday 4th of May 2013 10:09:20 AM

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Shomei

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Date: 11:52 AM May 4, 2013

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D: Sorry. -- Edited by Shomei on Saturday 4th of May 2013 12:12:12 PM __________________ I'm not done with these yet, but after I make my wolves, I can make yours, 1 PP for 5 wolves, if that sounds fair.

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